A mocking bird's song
skips like smooth stone-notes
across the lake
in a descending breezy scale.
In flight, or
water lips kissing,
momentarily,
whistled seductions,
the end is near:
a fading ripple dying
on sand and shell,
an unanswered inquiry
floating, floating down,
falling short the desire
of a waiting Spring dream.
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I like the alliteration in the last stanza.
Whistled seductions...
Ah!
wow!
i know the feeling...
Bittersweet
jan
I love the whole idea of your poem and how you gave it structure; the images put me right there in your mind as you saw it. So very, well crafted! :)
wonderfully hypnotic
thanks pat
:)
Beautiful Pat - as always your imagery stays in my mind for hours
this is beautiful!
(A mocking bird's song
skips like smooth stone-notes
across the lake
in a descending breezy scale-
this is my favorite part)
Almost reaches the out of reach.
Wow, incredible.
This whole beautiful poem is first set sail by your great title. The rest slid in and around my minds eye ever so smoothly.
Wonderful, Pat!
Thank you!
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