Monday, March 13, 2006

River Watch

Water gurgled
over smooth, thirsty stones, and
licked our ankles
with a cold, forking tongue.

Our hands held
in spite of slips and falls,
you kissed my cheek
when we reached flat sand.

The grass was soft
on the bank where we lay;
the sun washed bare skin,
while our clothes laid out to dry.

A hawk shrieked overhead,
you startled in my arms;
I nibbled at your ear, and
the high gliding predator moved on.

(all rights reserved Pat Paulk 2005)


Maddy said...

Very sweet tribute to love-
and protective innocent love-
celebrating nature naturally!

Masago said...

Beautifully captured moment!

its_baxter said...

this is sweet :) i'd love a day like this

steve said...


bre said...

Very beautiful and loving.

Russell Ragsdale said...

Pat, I don't know you enjoy the form or not but there are elements of a good haibun in this poem! Good write.

texas haijin said...

i echo vaughn.

floots said...

great wordpic
especially that last stanza

Borut said...

What about crossing the river of life? All you need is guts galore, and a little bit of love…?

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polona said...

my idea of a perfect day :)

Pat Paulk said...

Thanks guys!! I'm out of town, but I'm checking in on my brothers computer. Be back Thursday or Friday.

Nick Zegarac said...

Very interesting read, Pat. The predator in the sky moved on, eh? What about the one on two legs?

Pat Paulk said...

Ah, Nick. Yes, eventually.

boulies said...

Liked the way it ended. The menacing moment passed. Nicely put.

Pincushion said...

Ahhh..the predator falls in love too! :))
or so I always hope!
Lovely moments here...

Eric said...

well done.

Frances Mackay said...

Hey, great moment. you highlight the senses of the moment well. I enjoyed this very much. Frances

rebecca said...

sexy and romantic at the same time. made me tingle.

Pat Paulk said...

Boulies-Always does doesn't it? Thanks Boulies!

Pincushion-All Gods children get to fall in love. Thanks!

Eric-Thank you, sir!

Frances Mackay-Thanks for stopping by and commenting!

Rebecca-Thank you very much!