I took a couple of junk thoughts
I had laying around, and
tied them in the shape of a cross.
Covered the frame with paper-thin dreams,
and tethered it with hope to fly.
I ran on the soft sand of clouds
pulling it high with the wind of will.
It rose and dove, and danced this two-step
several times before it reposed at a height of pride.
It looked good hanging out with the sun,
new best friends kicking up the dust of blue sky.
All was well, right and fine with my fancy
‘til its pal ran away from a brood of dark bullies.
They took their saw-toothed sticks,
and beat my dream to its death.
All that was left was a frayed end of hope,
a whispering will of wind, and
a mind full of junk thoughts.
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I had laying around, and
tied them in the shape of a cross.
Covered the frame with paper-thin dreams,
and tethered it with hope to fly.
I ran on the soft sand of clouds
pulling it high with the wind of will.
It rose and dove, and danced this two-step
several times before it reposed at a height of pride.
It looked good hanging out with the sun,
new best friends kicking up the dust of blue sky.
All was well, right and fine with my fancy
‘til its pal ran away from a brood of dark bullies.
They took their saw-toothed sticks,
and beat my dream to its death.
All that was left was a frayed end of hope,
a whispering will of wind, and
a mind full of junk thoughts.
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22 comments:
Pat, I've just discovered your blog. Your poetry is amazing - I stand in awe and bow to your genius.
Thanks for the trip !
Wow!...the imagery is outstanding and I love the metaphor. Pat this is excellent.
WOW indeed!!!
one of your best, i think...
I'm in awe. that was wonderful, the image, the metaphor, the journey
Cool poem, Pat. A journey from square one to square one. I also enjoyed sounds like: "All that was left was a frayed end of hope," and also "with the wind of will."
Bravo, sir.
Junk indeed! Well done.
I ran on the soft sand of clouds
pulling it high with the wind of will Beautiful line.
What a wonderful kite.
:o)
absolute knockout pat
one of my favourites
thank you
i like the junk thoughts!
"Covered the frame with paper-thin dreams,
and tethered it with hope to fly."
Very nice. Love this one
"It looked good hanging out with the sun,
new best friends kicking up the dust of blue sky."
Wow! The imagery here is too good.
Guess I'm just going to have to get in line here. Wanted to say you held on to that metaphore very tightly. Startlingly bright images contrasting a dark metaphore, great job Pat. You had us with you all the way!
junk thoughts? This is a great poem!
love your images here.
"saw-toothed sticks," : why did i keep thinking of lightning?
One of your very best. Great poem, Pat.
Wow.....loved it!
You continue to amaze me with your use of the English language to paint pictures in my mind.
Fabulous! I think I say always though! Such wonderful imagery.. I smile.. I bought a kite on Friday. :)
love the kite imagery that I had in mind ..
did you every read "the kite runner" ? :)
Thanks for the art blog visit. But I continue to HAVE to work at the home depot LOL. I am having a big show in Houston next year so that' good news :) NINA
I love how you said this -- brilliant!
Liz, you humble me with such a high compliment. Thank you, and please come back!!
Anytime Janice!!
Janice Thomsom, thank you!!
Love Polona WOW's!! Thank you!!
Sage, thank you!! It was fun to write.
Rethabile,yep, back to the drawing board, but at least with a "thread of hope". Thanks you sir!!
Vaughn, I'm a pack rat. Thank you
!!
Trinitystar, it was fun to fly...for awhile. Thank you!!
Floots, thanks!!
Thanks Kai!! I have plenty.
Nancy, thank you!!
Gautami, I liked that line too. Thanks!!
Russell, all the way to the burning end. What a way to go out. Thanks!!
Dsnake, makes a pretty good "whuppin" stick, I think. Thanks!!
Thanks Don!!
Grammie, I love WOW's!! Thank you!!
Katie, just don't fly too close to the sun or in storms. Thank you!!
Nina, it's always my pleasure to visit your blog. You have an amazing talent. Thank you!!
Thanks Andrew!!
cool
one of my favourites i think.
well, until you knock out something better :)
Pat if you haven't decided on a 'theme' or another poem as the center piece of your publication I would seriously consider this one. It is truely one of your bests!
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