Friday, February 17, 2006

3 Haiku/Senyru (my feeble attempt)

gray Winter clouds,
intermittent blue sky—
our love

sagging power lines
miles of bending poles—
too many neighbors

yellow-face moon,
contrail scars—
passengers debark

9 comments:

Aurora said...

You've got the aha factor going on.:)

texas haijin said...

i like that second one a great bit.

bre said...

I like them...I think you do a good job w/ haikus...1st and last are my favorite

J. Andrew Lockhart said...

the first is really good!

Christine Klocek-Lim said...

These feel real to me. Love isn't all sunsets and flowers, but the occasional blue sky is fabulous when it happens. Ditto on the others. The power-lines one is especially true. . .

Pat Paulk said...

Thanks to all!!

Nick Zegarac said...

Wow. Great from start to finish. Nice touches make for solid writing. You've got very nice touches.

Eric said...

oh wow. i have been negligent reading my favorite blogs. what a pleasant surprise . . .

Pat Paulk said...

Thanks Eric and Nick. Haiku is contagious!