Friday, February 17, 2006

3 Haiku/Senyru (my feeble attempt)

gray Winter clouds,
intermittent blue sky—
our love

sagging power lines
miles of bending poles—
too many neighbors

yellow-face moon,
contrail scars—
passengers debark

8 comments:

Anonymous said...

You've got the aha factor going on.:)

Anonymous said...

I like them...I think you do a good job w/ haikus...1st and last are my favorite

J. Andrew Lockhart said...

the first is really good!

Unknown said...

These feel real to me. Love isn't all sunsets and flowers, but the occasional blue sky is fabulous when it happens. Ditto on the others. The power-lines one is especially true. . .

Pat Paulk said...

Thanks to all!!

Nick Zegarac said...

Wow. Great from start to finish. Nice touches make for solid writing. You've got very nice touches.

eric l houck jr said...

oh wow. i have been negligent reading my favorite blogs. what a pleasant surprise . . .

Pat Paulk said...

Thanks Eric and Nick. Haiku is contagious!