It was 12:30 a.m., and
I was standing on the beach
relinquishing my rights
to the next to last beer I drank.
I looked up to see a host of stars,
silently peering down,
sober, as far as I could tell.
There wasn’t much to talk about,
they knew what I was doing, and
I knew what they were up to.
I climbed in the boat,
turned the lights out, and
wondered if the flaming, little voyeurs
would still be pervertedly peeking,
when title to the last past onto the sand.
Subscribe to:
Post Comments (Atom)
22 comments:
"Starlight, star bright, first star that sees me tonight..." A dark vision.
is that the dark version, of starlight?
take care!
mmmmmm ... "pervertedly peeking" ... what a deliciously decadent way you have with words, pat. i thoroughly enjoyed this one.
Yup, plain spoken and down to earth!
and? were they still there for the encore? :)
thoroughly enjoyed this one!
Everything they say about renting beer is absolutely true. Sober, as far as you tell? Would you tell?
I guess they've been watching for light years - sounds like a good fishing trip (?)
a more refined version by a couple of stars. I'll stop now.
loved this poem Pat!
Maybe I am being naive but it sounded like you were urinating in public.
"relinquishing my rights
to the next to last beer I drank."
I laughed so loud that my wife in another room asked what was going on! :)
The joy of being a man, the whole world is a urinal........
Although you said it a lot more poetically......
'Relinquishing your rights'...and 'passing the title':
That was no ordinary beer; it left you with some fine legal jargon!
man, you can still write such good stuff after all those beers?
enjoyed your poem, thank you!
very nice
kidneys and starlight
what a combination to drive the universe :)
cheers
Interesting read...quite the ending. :-)
Decadent and thoughtful. Delightful write. I really enjoyed the mood created by this poem.
This is a ruminative poem touched with a light hearted smirk I bet you were relieved to hear that!
good poen, but with the title, I kept trying to read it to an Eric Clampton tune
Those stars are such kill joys
"Wish I may, wish I might..." Not from my perspective!!
Janice I guess it is. Thank you!!
Karasu, I'm glad you did! Actually, the stars were gorgeous last Friday night.
Joyce the only way I know to be!!
Polona, they were!! Thank you!!
Don, I'd never tell.
Steve, I guess my entertainment was no match for the speed of light.
Thank you Margie!!
C, I never would!! Well, almost never.
Andrew, I think laughter around your house is as highly prized as SLEEP!! Thank you!!
Nea, but you said it more succinctly. Thank you!!
Chuck, I've had some other experiences with the legal jargon. Thanks for coming by and commenting!!
Dsnake, my muse never writes sober!! Sometimes, she's pathetic.
Thank you Kai!!
Floots, never thought of it that way. what a great alternative fuel source. One I'm already equipped to handle!!
Vaughn, it's an ending I go through most nights.
Natalia,the mood was much better upon first acquiring the beer. Thank you!!
Russell, I assure you I was relieved!!
Tim, now you know who's peeking in your windows at night!! Thank you!!
Sage, I debated about using that title, but I figured if it's good enough for Clapton...
Sue, you would've at least thought they would've showed up naked, and we could've all gone skinny dipping!!!
Post a Comment