Tuesday, March 06, 2007

Last Stand


The last of the firewood
stands in the firebox, uniform
split and trimmed, like soldiers
in a light armored troop carrier
waiting to take on fire.



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23 comments:

Katie McKenna said...

That is so true! I can see the picture you paint with words so well!
I used to keep a box of wood like that in my cabin. Oh, well , not all perfectly the same.. yet...

Kai C. said...

niceely done

Katie McKenna said...

I am ever so slow! I just listened to you reading your poetry. Fabulous voice!

Masago said...

Wow, puts in perspective what the troops face when they reach the battle front. Good one.

Margie said...

Very good one Pat!
I enjoyed it!
And, great reading...as always!

trinitystar said...

Perfect! Awaiting to be ablaze with life.

Borut said...

Great, I love the warrior spirit wherever I come across it. Great word economy too!:)

Pris said...

I like that image, Pat. Well done.

floots said...

nice one pat
(it makes "friendly fire" a far more pleasant image too) :)

david santos said...

Hello, Pat!
This poem is fantastic, thank you
Good week for you

Janice Thomson said...

Wow is right!...I'm with Masago on this one.

sage said...

nice picture, but the military reference and being consumed by a fire is depressing, but I'll forget about taht and since it's cold today I'm ready to go home and light a fire!

polona said...

wow!

jel said...

thanks , that make me smile! :)

J. Andrew Lockhart said...

good way of looking at it!

tongue in cheek said...

I love how you strike a match and create a fire with collected words.
I have missed your poems since I have been away.

Russell Ragsdale said...

I am enjoying that you have moved to a shorter poetic frame of reference. You a making this spoem size work very well. The shorter poem is always harder to bring off well but you are doing a great job!

steve said...

taking on fire - sober thought, I like how this is worked in with the comfort of the firewood box.

dsnake1 said...

great image, pat.
can relate to that, the APC. :)

MB said...

Sure gives it a sober twist.

Pat Paulk said...

Katie, thanks for coming by and coming back and listening!! When you buy them at the grocery store in plastic bags, they're pretty much uniform.

Thank you Kai!!

Thanks Vaughn!! I can't imagine.

Thank you Margie!!

Trinitystar, one way of looking at it. Thank you!!

Thanks Borut!!

Thank you Pris!!

Floots, another good way of looking at it!!

Thanks David Santos!! Wish you one as well.

Thanks Janice!! All WOWs are greatly appreciated.

Sage, I think Trinitystar and Floots have a good perspective on it. Thanks!!

A Polona WOW, thank you very much!!

Thanks Janice, glad I could bring a smile.

Thanks andrew!!

Corey, I have missed your comments. Thank you!! Glad you're back.

Russell, thanks!! I prefer the shorter poem, but, maybe that's because I'm lazy.

Thanks Steve!!. Not sure why, but that's what they reminded me of.

Dsnake, Yeah I bet you can. Thanks!!

Thanks MB!!

robot55.5 said...

I really like this one.

writerwoman said...

Love the solider reference. It makes the wood seem alive and like it is doing its duty, fulfilling its destiny.