Monday, March 12, 2007

School Of Thoughts

My thoughts,
swimming like a school of porgies—
jumping, darting,
crinkle up the placid surface
of the first low tide of the day.

25 comments:

Kai C. said...

nicee....

Russell Ragsdale said...

Low tide moments can be real peaceful. Good one Pat!

floots said...

nice idea pat
wish i had that sort of flexibility :)

jel said...

a school of what??

Janice Thomson said...

Good one Pat!...love the imagery

polona said...

that's an excellent tanka, pat! :)

Katie McKenna said...

cute!

urban butterfly said...

what a clever poem! I love it! =)

gracie said...

yep, my brain does that too... great way of describing it!

Margie said...

Very good one Pat!
I enjoyed it very much!

Oh, your comment today was so nice....thanks so very much!
I like the poet in you too!
Your poems are simply...The Best!

Borut said...

Schooling your thoughs!?:) A great idea!:)

trinitystar said...

great train of thoughts put into words. :o)

tongue in cheek said...

even at low tide you bring waves of goodness.

Pris said...

Now I'd like to see the inside of YOUR brain, Pat :-)(and yes, excellent tanka)

Lyrically speaking said...

I love the title of this piece and how you kept it short

sage said...

good images as always--low tide means mud--but also the time for oysters and floundering.

Pat Paulk said...

Thank you Kai!!

Russell, or real low. Thanks!!

Floots I can't speak for your flexibility, but mine left along time ago. Thanks!!

Porgies. They're a salt water bait fish that school and when being chased really rip through the surface of the water.

Thanks Janice!!

Polona, Thank you. I think I'm missing the pivot.

Thanks Katie!!

Thanks UB!!

Gracie, I guess it's a normal human condition. Thanks!!

Thanks Margie, just speaking the truth.

Borut, my thoughts are too unruly to school.

Thanks Trinitystar!!

Thanks Corey!!

Pris, I'm not sure I do. Thank you!!

Thanks Lyrically Speaking!! I do better with shorter pieces.

Sage, growing up on the coast of Georgia, know exactly what you're talking about. Thanks!!

MB said...

Now that I know what a porgie is... I like this. I think I've seen porgies in action, or at least something like them, and it's an apt comparison.

Pat Paulk said...

MB, I like what you thought it was better.

MB said...

A corgie/porpoise mix? ... not to mention there's something called a dogfish!

gautami tripathy said...

"...school of porgies.."

Ah...

Masago said...

All I can say is "Wow".

Sue hardy-Dawson said...

I'm glad our thoughts don't have to go to school, mine mostly used to lurk in the playground outside. I think there mabe another poem their if I can borrow the title Pat?

Love this: are porgies a type of fish then?

bre31 said...

good job.

Lainey said...

The imagery makes me homesick. LOL, I could almost smell low tide. Very nice Pat