Thursday, March 08, 2007

Watermark Express


Drops on the shower door, like
tiny locomotives on invisible rails,
streak through “S” curves and straight-a-ways
hauling off the remnants of a day
digging in garden dirt.



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20 comments:

Masago said...

It's amazing how you so deftly add colour to your words with just black on white! Very good!

Cathy said...

Oh...I look forwad to the summer when I can experience that again!

Kai C. said...

nicely done

Kai C. said...

nicely done

J. Andrew Lockhart said...

I'm getting ready to have a shower -- I'll think of this. :)

Rethabile said...

This is so original! Yet so common an everyday event...

floots said...

not sure i should be enjoying a poem about you in the shower
but i did :)

Russell Ragsdale said...

The visual aspect of this poem is very powerful and effective. Great job Pat.

Pris said...

So vivid, Pat! I like!!

Nancy said...

Its a pleasure to be able to visit your blog. Your words turn every day things into events of joy.
I've enjoyed watching the rain run down our windows during a good New England storm.
thanks

Margie said...

Hey, I liked this one Pat!
Time for me to jump in the shower!

Thanks for stoping by to see the new addition to our family...isn't he cute?

Katie McKenna said...

I love the way you "see" things, the way you write! Thank you!

sage said...

ya'll already digging up the garden down there? Do you plant on Good Friday?

I too have watched those drops of water run down the same curves and lines down into the tub, but have never written about them--well done.

Janice Thomson said...

Wonderful imagery Pat...and I'm green with envy that you were busy in the garden dirt!

Borut said...

If it were not for dirt, the whole thing would be quite transparent!:) We live in a mysterious world, if only we could see it!:)

Pat Paulk said...

Vaugh, a wonderful compliment from a fellow colorer!! My problem is staying in the lines.

Cathy, I assume you're talking about gardening, not taking a shower?

Thanks Kai X 2!!

Andrew, when I take a bath I get to play with my boats and ducks.

Rethabile, that's all I have. Thanks!!

Floots, not sure I should enjoy your comment, but I do. Thanks!!

Thanks Russell!!

Thanks Pris!!

Nancy, it's a pleasure having you read my words. Stay dry, and thanks!!

Margie, I hope you had a wonderful shower. He is a cutey!!Thanks!!

Katie, always glad to have someone enjoy what I see!! Thank you!!

Sage, I was actually planting some flowers. I think that is supposed to be the day. Thanks!!

Janice, a postive side to living in the South. Hopefully you can do the same soon. Thanks!!

Borut, if it weren't for the dirt life wouldn't be near as much fun.

MB said...

You described those drops well! Made me think back to my grandfather's toy trains for some reason.

polona said...

you make a shower seem spectacular!
another great one!

Nea said...

hmmmmmmmm a lot of people here taking a shower with you this evening, getting kind of crowded in here.....haha You definintely need a bigger shower, I just slipped on one of those S curves and and fell out the door.......

This was great pat, but I will never take a shower again without thinking about this one..... :)

tongue in cheek said...

We could see you!