Tangling tongues swelled
into burning skin-seas,
flopping down exhausted
on orgasmic, moon-sweat cloth.
Star tines tingled
as they inhaled second-hand lust,
you whispered "again" and "again"
in my fountain-of-youth ear.
The linen canopy
that covered what we stole
was washed and tumbled dry,
but, that distance in your eyes
will always be mine.
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*fans self*
Writing more poems about your chiropractor, huh?
nice
oh i forgot to say
thank u
so
thank u
love that final image
why do we hold intangibles so tightly :)
wow...This one is so intense...I'm not sure I'm old enough to read it.
:o)
Agree with Floots - that final image...
love this one, intense imagery and another homerun ending...
Hmm, this is rather provocative. ;-)
I had that feeling of whether I should be watching or not! :)
...once again adjectives are put to work. :-)
like your ending, "that distance in your eyes will always be mine"
ooh...nice!
Really a strong one, Pat. Lust and sadness combined. It sticks with me.
"but, that distance in your eyes
will always be mine" ...wondeful closing lines. I really liked this poem.
Bittersweet, can't think of a better compliment, thank you!! Tried to leave a comment on your blog, but was unable to. Loved your poems!!
Not exactly...
Thank you Kai!!
Thanks Jon!!
Floots the older I get, it seems they're all I have.
Whitney, I certainly am not mature enough to write it. but I did.
Thanks Borut!!
Thank you Polona!! Never hit a homerun, struck out a bunch!!
Christine, I guess it is a little different than my norm, but I do have red blood pulsing through my veins, inspite of what AA believes. Thank you!!
Andrew, Whitney I believe, you have 4 kids, and they didn't happen in a dream.
Vaughn, they are the workhorses of poetry. Thank you!!
Thanks Sage!!
Mikaelah, nice comment!!
Thanks Dustin!
Thanks Pris! Could almost be a
C & W song.
Don, thank you!!
Thanks Tim!!
WoW Pat! You seldom open this door for us but, now that you've let us have a peep, we hope you will let us in again sometime.
I'm glad I went hunting for this one. I gave my last finals Friday and am playing catch up on my blogging. What a beautiful, wistful trip down memory lane!
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