Tuesday, September 19, 2006

Abstract Of Delusion

He skywrites personas
without wings and props,
plays hopscotch on lily pads, and
hides in the mysteries of angels.
Life is an abstract of delusion,
skipping stones off the still waters of sanity.
We used to be friends, but
the angels turned out to be mirror images
of an all consuming black hole;
I was trashed in a torn photograph
with an old black hat full of smelly felt-air.

21 comments:

Joyce said...

Nice image and appropriate to delusion.

samuru999 said...

Life is an abstract of delusion,
skipping stones off the still waters of sanity.

Wonderful lines Pat!
Great poem... as always

polona said...

awww... great write as always, pat!

MB said...

Strong stuff, well-couched in strong images.

Hototogisu said...

this one is haunting, pat. thank you.

C said...

I feel like I see a homeless man stumbling in the streets - claiming gutters to be black hole mirrors and seeing angels in his eyes.

J. Andrew Lockhart said...

I love your description! Haunting...

Russell Ragsdale said...

Everybody has agreed that this is strong and haunting but I sense ange and reustration as well. Nobody likes delusion.

Russell Ragsdale said...

That was anger and frustration. Sorry, typos

floots said...

"smelly felt-air" - i think we all breathe in our share
dark and thought-provoking pat
cheers

Cathy said...

I loved this...

Wink said...

Another great one Pat!
Great poem!

Don Iannone said...

Nicely done St. Pat. Really liked this one. Watch those hats...at our age they can wear off our remaining hair.

Masago said...

Haunting, yes...also mind-twisting. Well done.

Osquer said...

"skipping stones off the still waters of sanity"

I really like that.

Pris said...

Could really relate to this one, Pat. Good write!

samuru999 said...

Pat
Thanks so much!
That was such a nice compliment!
And, you most defintely
Have your poetry dowm to a fine art!

Natalia L. Rudychev said...

Powerful imagery! Excellent write!

**Silvermoon** said...

Superb! Please consider publishing this one. Strong sound, imagery, flow, symbolism- I relate to the meat of the thoughts cleverly interwoven and of course the clever closing clincher play on words "(smelly)felt-air."

Amalendu said...

It requires the skills of a master craftsperson to make the abstract of delusion and you did it s well Pat...
it is a lovely reading...

Pat Paulk said...

Joyce, it's a way of life for some. Thank you!!

Thank you Margie!!

Thanks Polona!!

MB, the only thing I couch is me fat arse!!Thank you!!

Thank you Karasu!!

C, you have great eyesight!!

Andrew very sad real life experience. Thank you!!

Russell, your senses are right on the mark!!

Floots, yeah, but do my best not to make a habit of it!! Thank you!!

Thank you Cathy!!

Thank you sir Wink!!

Don, especially when they're ripped from your head!! Oh well, kept it longer than I thought I would.

Vaughn, you're right!!

Thanks Osquer!!

Thanks Pris!!

Margie, you make me blush...

Thank you Natalia!!

Silvermoon, what a very kind compliment, thank you!!

Shyamalee, thank you!!