Monday, September 04, 2006

Revolving Sacrifice

The sun slid
orange-face smashed
down a blue-altar wall.
It didn’t fall in a hurry,
leave desperation scratches,
it fell g r a d u a l l y
so pine-needle-priests
could sprinkle handfuls of bleeding fire.
A ritualistic blessing,
a promise of rebirth.
Night prayed to the stars in moon-vestments
for a dawn of revolving sacrifice.

20 comments:

C said...

I like the use of the sunset and moon light.

samuru999 said...

Beautiful... as always Pat!
There you go with your amazing use of words again!
Love it!

Poetry by Kai said...

nice....
i didn't take that picture.

jel said...

nice! :) very

floots said...

stunning
new and very special words to an old tune
loved it

dsnake1 said...

Great imagery!
one of my favourites from you.

wish i could write like that.

Russell Ragsdale said...

I was startled by the familiar. Loved it Pat! I'd love to have you put something on the poetry carnival.

MB said...

Pat, who needs a camera when you can create such vivid images?

Wink said...

Pat,
Very visual!!!
Really inspiring!!!!

bre said...

It amazes me how you can put what you see into words, and make it appear just as beautiful in words as it is in appearance.

Don Iannone said...

Good one pat. Nice images.

Anonymous said...

Interesting take on the sunset. Quite grotesque in description, but so vivid... it's beautiful. It's a mix of the sacred with unholy. It's as if your appreciating godliness while being repulsed by it at the same time.

EATING POETRY said...

Interesting take on the sunset. Quite grotesque in description, but so vivid... it's beautiful. It's a mix of the sacred with unholy. It's as if your appreciating godliness while being repulsed by it at the same time.

Sue hardy-Dawson said...

Beautiful immagery a feast for the mind.

Hototogisu said...

i can almost see that sun slip slidin away, pat.

NINANINA said...

wow that is powerful.. the ritualistic setting of the sun... I like the part about the skyline being an altar.

love it
nina

Osquer said...

"could grab handfuls of bleeding fire" I can almost feel it dripping through my own fingers!

**SiilvermOOn** said...

I love the strength of this piece and how you wove nature and your faith together. Powerful throughout. One of my favorites of yours!

Amalendu said...

Compelling images...
it is lovely Pat...

Pat Paulk said...

Thnak you C!!

Margie, ther you go with your kind comments!!

Thank you Kai!!

Thank you JEL!!

Thanks Floots!! It's a good old tune that never gets tiring.

Dsnake, you under rate your self. Thank you!!

Thanks Russell!! I'll send you a link in the next couple of days.

MB, aren't you kind!! You create some prettu vivid images yourself!!

Thanks Wink!!

It amazes me what you can do with your drawings and paintings. Thank you Mandy!!

Thanks Don!!

Anonymous/EP, it does have a grotesque quality to it doesn't it? I do write what I see. Thank you!!

Sue, glad i could feed your mind!!

Karasu, that's exactly what it did!!

Thank you Nina!!

Osquer, that might get a little warm. Thank you!!

Silvermoon, thank you!!

Thanks Shyamalee!!